Stacia and Jaye posted their take on my dialogue at the League site. You can check it out here along with comments from others. http://www.leagueofreluctantadults.com/2008/04/dialogue-5.html

I picked a certain piece because it had a soap box feel to it, which others noticedright off. The language wasn't as tight as it could have been. This I partly blame on Microsoft Word, and my inability to ignore its damned red-line editor. I've learned that written dialogue doesn't always conform to proper grammer and have changed my writing habits since then. Their comments reminded me that I need to go back through my work and fix those little spots where I used MS Word as a crutch instead of a tool.

Other then that, it was a blast to have them read it and comment. I love feedback!